File talk:Virtual reality.jpg

• Rubric filled out? No.
• First sentence brief and definitional? Brief and definitional
• Concise summary and overview of entire article? Somewhat rambling and too informal
• Table of contents? Well constructed
• Illustration: Accurate and informative. This is a copyrighted illustration, and Wikipedia does not publish copyrighted illustrations. Thus, you need to find an illustration that is not copyrighted; it should have a Creative Commons license; or you may create your own illustration.
• Between 100 and 300 words? Within limits
• Overall, this is a very problematic first benchmark. First, the article almost completely overlaps an existing Wikipedia article, and thus is not an appropriate article for this course. Second, the article has essentially no relevance to neuroscience, and so again is not an appropriate topic for this course. Third, the illustration needs to be replaced. Fourth, the writing is far too informal. Please write a new term paper proposal and a new first benchmark for that proposal as soon as possible.

Hillel Chiel (talk) 21:03, 1 November 2016 (EDT)